Your story (and dog) are incredibly cute! And so is your website, I really like the pictures and the colors and I also like the fact that the stories will take place all over the world so we will probably see some beautiful pictures of these places King goes! I am so excited to read all about King's adventures around the world and how he helps so many people! I am curious to know if this dog has super powers that he implements in each of his stories? Or does he just have the ability to bring soldiers back to life? I would love to see him have all sorts of comical super powers that a dog might have in this world you have created! Maybe his begging face is so good that it kills bad people!! Or maybe he can sense that the big bad wolf is hungry around the baby! The possibilities are endless and I am very excited to see the stories! Great job!
Hey Sarah, such an awesome idea for a storybook! First of all, dogs are my favorite animals so this is a story I will have to check back on in the weeks to come to see what kinds of adventures and situations King gets himself into. I also really think it’s a great idea to make the story coming from the dog’s perspective. This makes for a more interesting storyline and more creative viewpoints. It is also really cool that the dog has powers, I am really curious to see how this plays into the adventures he gets himself into. I am impressed that you provided a summary into the stories to come because it is a great way to intrigue the reader and also keep yourself organized. Do you have a German shepherd of your own, or what was the inspiration for this story? Keep up the great work!
I like your layout and banner of the storybook. I am so excited to see the images of a German Shepherd. My boyfriend and I have been wanting one for so long. I am giving you a big thumb up by writing in the perspective of a German Shepherd. This is similar to what I am doing to the elephant-head God, Ganesha in my storybook. You gave enough information about yourself, such as your hobbies, your jobs and your physical appearance. You also provided some hints of what your future stories are going to be. I like how these stories are taking place in all around the world. I bet you can attract a lot of readers that love to travel, which includes me. You made “King” so powerful and magical by keeping people safe and bring people back to life. I can’t wait to read more stories of King.
Sarah, your storybook idea is precious! Having King as the narrator gives your story a really earnest and sweet tone. I appreciated that your Introduction laid out the stories you will have King tell in the weeks to come — it makes it easy to know where to jump right in. In your story about Mount Ararat, I thought it would be interesting to know how King did his research before heading out to the location. Did he use the internet, or did he use a book? I think it'd be cute and funny to learn how a dog was able to do research — maybe you can include details about how it's tough for him to type with his paws, so he has to go slowly. Overall, I loved your first story! It was wonderfully fun to read about King, and I can't wait to read more of his magical adventures.
Hello, Sarah! First of all, great work! I really liked the idea of using the dog, King, as a narrator for all of your stories in your storybook. I think that using the same narrator for each story really gives the reader a deeper understanding of the character.
So while looking through your storybook and reading your first story a few questions came to my mind. In your introduction King mentioned that Mount Ararat was where he learned to be a rescue dog, but in the story it seemed as though King was already an experienced rescuer. Was this his first mission from training? If it was his first mission maybe you could mention how nervous King was to do well, and was pleasantly surprised to find out how well he did. Also, in the introduction King mentions that he has special powers to bring people back from the dead, but when I read the story it almost seemed as if the man just became warm enough but was alive the whole time. What if it was clear that he was dead and King really did have supernatural powers that he discovers!
Overall you did a fantastic job! You are clearly a very imaginative and skilled writer. Keep up the good work!
Hey Sarah, I am a dog lover and really enjoyed your stories. Having the stories told from the point of the view of the dog is a great idea. In the introduction, explaining what the future stories are going to be makes it easy for readers to follow along and give them a little clip of what story they will be reading. I also really like the historical information you placed in the story. You could probably delete that information from the introduction since you explain it more in the story. You could also add more information about King life when he is not rescuing. You could even explain what got him started in his job as a search and rescue dog. Was he bread for it or did an owner with a passion to help others train him to become a search and rescue dog? A small issue I had while reading your story was that the story was a centered. Most people are not used to reading this way, not anything major, but it would be easier if it the paragraphs were left-aligned. Great story, I cannot wait to read the future installments in the storybook project.
Hey Sarah- Your story was really cute. I also enjoy the layout of your website. Everything is very clean and tidy, and there is no confusion or clutter anywhere. I had never heard the story of Aralez. Licking the wounds of dead soldiers to bring them back to life? That's just precious. I appreciated how you centered your post layout, and still kept it tidy by keeping all of the paragraphs the same length. I did not notice any grammatical errors in the story- and honestly I can tell you write with a lot of confidence. This is actually my first time reading a story from this class- I'm in Indian Epics. I think it's cool that you guys have so much freedom and can write a story like this one. I'd love to write a story about my cat- MY favorite animal. Lastly, I really liked that you chose to write the story in the first person perspective. It makes a big difference when an author can confidently create a narrative from the limited perspective- especially when its a dog! Overall, great story- and maybe I will get to tune into this blog later in the semester! Good luck, and don't hesitate to check out my website!
Sarah, I just read your Storybook introduction and first story. I think that it is a really cool idea to write from a dog's perspective as most of the class' projects are over human beings. This is a completely different perspective, and one that we do not usually consider. In the introduction, I like that you have a brief overview of each tale that you are going to include in your project. It shows that you have been planning and organizing seriously since the beginning of this project. In the first story, it was nice including the details on the actual mountain of Ararat as many people reading these tales will probably not know anything about the mountain. The one thing that I would like to suggest is on the actual layout of the blog. I would suggest not centering all of the text because it looks a little distracting. I would move it to the left side of the page and indent accordingly. Good job on this. I hope to read more from your blog in the future.
Hey Sarah! First off I really enjoyed the images that you have used for your story book. This may be because I’m a dog lover but they just seem to fit so well in my opinion. I also really liked the layout you did because it fits with the setting of your stories. One small thing I might change is the fact that you start both stories along the lines of “Hey its me king again”. I think that is fine to do on one of them but you might try to mix it up on one of them. In terms of writing your stories are extremely vivid for the reader which I enjoy. I think that it is a great thing to be detailed because it is coming from a dog’s perspective so this adds to the stories. One thing I might suggest is that you format the way the paragraphs are laid out a little different. I found it a little strange how it all came from the center but then again it is your storybook so do as you please! Great Work.
Hi Sarah! First of all, I love the design of your site — it's really beautiful and clean. And the pictures you include of King are great. In the first story, I thought King's adventure was really neat, but I wondered why King didn't know about his powers before climbing the mountain to rescue all those soldiers? Seems like that's what would make him a great search and rescue dog, and like he might know that before going on this mission. I also thought some of the story got lost in the history you gave about Mt. Ararat. In your second story, I thought it was really clever how you wove in another dog tale from a different part of the world and made it your own. I did think it was a little odd how the story seemed to take some unnecessary diversions, like when King was talking about the goat farm. Other than that though, great job with your storybook — I'm looking forward to reading more.
I was really blown away by the images that you used for King! They look fantastic and so in the moment. I like how you developed these stories around an actual dog. King seems so photogenic and happy all of the time, and it makes your storybook seem so much more real. So, I think you did a great job with that! I really like how to stories are told in a first person perspective. I have found that it makes the reader more engaged, and I definitely think it is a great writing tool. I like how King comes to a realization in the first story that he has a special gift. He learns that he has the ability to save humans and bring those that are frozen back to life. I think the second story also highlights King and his development as a hero. He begins to recognize his own strength and successfully saves the group of people walking along the street. I think it is absolutely great. You could maybe add in some dialogue if you wanted, but who knows if King can actually understand humans. I am excited to see what comes next in King's adventures!
Hi, Sarah! I just read your introduction and stories on your storybook website and I really enjoyed them! Not to mention, your pictures were actually adorable and I love that it was focused around a real dog. I would love to get to meet King someday! Your pictures fit so well and you did a really good job of explaining what was going on and I really appreciated how you paid such great attention to detailing. I also like the way that you presented it from King's perspective. As far as a suggestion, you could add some conversations that add greater character development. This suggestion is a little bit more trivial but it might be beneficial to adjust your paragraphs just a little bit. Some of your layout made it confusing to follow at times. Good writing overall! Can't wait to come back and see where you take your work!
Hello again Sarah! Wow I absolutely loved King's first adventure! It was really exciting to see that he was traveling to such a cool place filled with rich history! My mind is at ease that Noah's Ark was not found because that would have been devastating to all logic and scientific communities everywhere. It looks like science wins again :) I did manage to find a very small mistake, I think you meant to say, "...because they called ME Aralez!" instead of, "...because they called Aralez!" Correct me if I am wrong though! I thought it was really amazing how brave and efficient King was during this mission and think he is quite the amazing dog! I also really liked how you kept a dog's type of thinking throughout the story. This was a refreshing a beautiful story. Keep up the good work! I am excited to read the next one when I come back to it! :)
Hi Sarah! You're storybook is very unique in that it is told from the perspective of and centered around a dog. You don't see that everyday and especially since a lot of the storybooks that our classmates are writing are told by a human being. The pictures you use to give us, the reader, a visual sense of what King looks like is astounding. Now we have a face to put to a name and it really creates a prefect visual for the reader. Another great thing you chose to add to each story is the fact that each region or location gets its own little introduction and history lesson. I've never heard of the two locations used in your first two stories, but only after reading the first paragraph I was enlightened by it's proper introduction. You also do a very good job with your authors note. I get a little bit of the original stories background and it makes the picture more whole.
Hey Sarah! Wow this semester has gone by fast! I really really loved your storybook. It was such a unique idea to focus the perspective from a dogs point of view. I think that your portfolio is the only one I have read that hasnt been from the view point of a human. The images you use was a good idea as well. It lets us put a face to the character so you can really imaging what king is doing throughout the stories. I love stories like that. Its like playing a little a movie in your head and this time I can put King right into those movies. I think one thing I would change is the way your paragraphs are in the center. If that makes you happy I understand but for me I guess I am just used to reading from all the way from the left to right. But other than that you did a good job of providing detail which made for good imagery. Great stories!
Hello Sarah :)
ReplyDeleteYour story (and dog) are incredibly cute! And so is your website, I really like the pictures and the colors and I also like the fact that the stories will take place all over the world so we will probably see some beautiful pictures of these places King goes! I am so excited to read all about King's adventures around the world and how he helps so many people! I am curious to know if this dog has super powers that he implements in each of his stories? Or does he just have the ability to bring soldiers back to life? I would love to see him have all sorts of comical super powers that a dog might have in this world you have created! Maybe his begging face is so good that it kills bad people!! Or maybe he can sense that the big bad wolf is hungry around the baby! The possibilities are endless and I am very excited to see the stories! Great job!
Hey Sarah, such an awesome idea for a storybook! First of all, dogs are my favorite animals so this is a story I will have to check back on in the weeks to come to see what kinds of adventures and situations King gets himself into. I also really think it’s a great idea to make the story coming from the dog’s perspective. This makes for a more interesting storyline and more creative viewpoints. It is also really cool that the dog has powers, I am really curious to see how this plays into the adventures he gets himself into. I am impressed that you provided a summary into the stories to come because it is a great way to intrigue the reader and also keep yourself organized. Do you have a German shepherd of your own, or what was the inspiration for this story? Keep up the great work!
ReplyDeleteHi, Sarah!
ReplyDeleteI like your layout and banner of the storybook. I am so excited to see the images of a German Shepherd. My boyfriend and I have been wanting one for so long. I am giving you a big thumb up by writing in the perspective of a German Shepherd. This is similar to what I am doing to the elephant-head God, Ganesha in my storybook. You gave enough information about yourself, such as your hobbies, your jobs and your physical appearance. You also provided some hints of what your future stories are going to be. I like how these stories are taking place in all around the world. I bet you can attract a lot of readers that love to travel, which includes me. You made “King” so powerful and magical by keeping people safe and bring people back to life. I can’t wait to read more stories of King.
Sarah, your storybook idea is precious! Having King as the narrator gives your story a really earnest and sweet tone. I appreciated that your Introduction laid out the stories you will have King tell in the weeks to come — it makes it easy to know where to jump right in. In your story about Mount Ararat, I thought it would be interesting to know how King did his research before heading out to the location. Did he use the internet, or did he use a book? I think it'd be cute and funny to learn how a dog was able to do research — maybe you can include details about how it's tough for him to type with his paws, so he has to go slowly. Overall, I loved your first story! It was wonderfully fun to read about King, and I can't wait to read more of his magical adventures.
ReplyDeleteHello, Sarah! First of all, great work! I really liked the idea of using the dog, King, as a narrator for all of your stories in your storybook. I think that using the same narrator for each story really gives the reader a deeper understanding of the character.
ReplyDeleteSo while looking through your storybook and reading your first story a few questions came to my mind. In your introduction King mentioned that Mount Ararat was where he learned to be a rescue dog, but in the story it seemed as though King was already an experienced rescuer. Was this his first mission from training? If it was his first mission maybe you could mention how nervous King was to do well, and was pleasantly surprised to find out how well he did. Also, in the introduction King mentions that he has special powers to bring people back from the dead, but when I read the story it almost seemed as if the man just became warm enough but was alive the whole time. What if it was clear that he was dead and King really did have supernatural powers that he discovers!
Overall you did a fantastic job! You are clearly a very imaginative and skilled writer. Keep up the good work!
Hey Sarah,
ReplyDeleteI am a dog lover and really enjoyed your stories. Having the stories told from the point of the view of the dog is a great idea. In the introduction, explaining what the future stories are going to be makes it easy for readers to follow along and give them a little clip of what story they will be reading. I also really like the historical information you placed in the story. You could probably delete that information from the introduction since you explain it more in the story. You could also add more information about King life when he is not rescuing. You could even explain what got him started in his job as a search and rescue dog. Was he bread for it or did an owner with a passion to help others train him to become a search and rescue dog? A small issue I had while reading your story was that the story was a centered. Most people are not used to reading this way, not anything major, but it would be easier if it the paragraphs were left-aligned. Great story, I cannot wait to read the future installments in the storybook project.
Hey Sarah-
ReplyDeleteYour story was really cute. I also enjoy the layout of your website. Everything is very clean and tidy, and there is no confusion or clutter anywhere. I had never heard the story of Aralez. Licking the wounds of dead soldiers to bring them back to life? That's just precious. I appreciated how you centered your post layout, and still kept it tidy by keeping all of the paragraphs the same length. I did not notice any grammatical errors in the story- and honestly I can tell you write with a lot of confidence. This is actually my first time reading a story from this class- I'm in Indian Epics. I think it's cool that you guys have so much freedom and can write a story like this one. I'd love to write a story about my cat- MY favorite animal. Lastly, I really liked that you chose to write the story in the first person perspective. It makes a big difference when an author can confidently create a narrative from the limited perspective- especially when its a dog! Overall, great story- and maybe I will get to tune into this blog later in the semester! Good luck, and don't hesitate to check out my website!
Sarah, I just read your Storybook introduction and first story. I think that it is a really cool idea to write from a dog's perspective as most of the class' projects are over human beings. This is a completely different perspective, and one that we do not usually consider. In the introduction, I like that you have a brief overview of each tale that you are going to include in your project. It shows that you have been planning and organizing seriously since the beginning of this project. In the first story, it was nice including the details on the actual mountain of Ararat as many people reading these tales will probably not know anything about the mountain. The one thing that I would like to suggest is on the actual layout of the blog. I would suggest not centering all of the text because it looks a little distracting. I would move it to the left side of the page and indent accordingly. Good job on this. I hope to read more from your blog in the future.
ReplyDeleteHey Sarah! First off I really enjoyed the images that you have used for your story book. This may be because I’m a dog lover but they just seem to fit so well in my opinion. I also really liked the layout you did because it fits with the setting of your stories. One small thing I might change is the fact that you start both stories along the lines of “Hey its me king again”. I think that is fine to do on one of them but you might try to mix it up on one of them. In terms of writing your stories are extremely vivid for the reader which I enjoy. I think that it is a great thing to be detailed because it is coming from a dog’s perspective so this adds to the stories. One thing I might suggest is that you format the way the paragraphs are laid out a little different. I found it a little strange how it all came from the center but then again it is your storybook so do as you please! Great Work.
ReplyDeleteHi Sarah! First of all, I love the design of your site — it's really beautiful and clean. And the pictures you include of King are great. In the first story, I thought King's adventure was really neat, but I wondered why King didn't know about his powers before climbing the mountain to rescue all those soldiers? Seems like that's what would make him a great search and rescue dog, and like he might know that before going on this mission. I also thought some of the story got lost in the history you gave about Mt. Ararat. In your second story, I thought it was really clever how you wove in another dog tale from a different part of the world and made it your own. I did think it was a little odd how the story seemed to take some unnecessary diversions, like when King was talking about the goat farm. Other than that though, great job with your storybook — I'm looking forward to reading more.
ReplyDeleteHey there, Sarah!
ReplyDeleteI was really blown away by the images that you used for King! They look fantastic and so in the moment. I like how you developed these stories around an actual dog. King seems so photogenic and happy all of the time, and it makes your storybook seem so much more real. So, I think you did a great job with that! I really like how to stories are told in a first person perspective. I have found that it makes the reader more engaged, and I definitely think it is a great writing tool. I like how King comes to a realization in the first story that he has a special gift. He learns that he has the ability to save humans and bring those that are frozen back to life. I think the second story also highlights King and his development as a hero. He begins to recognize his own strength and successfully saves the group of people walking along the street. I think it is absolutely great. You could maybe add in some dialogue if you wanted, but who knows if King can actually understand humans. I am excited to see what comes next in King's adventures!
Hi, Sarah!
ReplyDeleteI just read your introduction and stories on your storybook website and I really enjoyed them! Not to mention, your pictures were actually adorable and I love that it was focused around a real dog. I would love to get to meet King someday! Your pictures fit so well and you did a really good job of explaining what was going on and I really appreciated how you paid such great attention to detailing. I also like the way that you presented it from King's perspective. As far as a suggestion, you could add some conversations that add greater character development. This suggestion is a little bit more trivial but it might be beneficial to adjust your paragraphs just a little bit. Some of your layout made it confusing to follow at times. Good writing overall! Can't wait to come back and see where you take your work!
Hello again Sarah!
ReplyDeleteWow I absolutely loved King's first adventure! It was really exciting to see that he was traveling to such a cool place filled with rich history! My mind is at ease that Noah's Ark was not found because that would have been devastating to all logic and scientific communities everywhere. It looks like science wins again :)
I did manage to find a very small mistake, I think you meant to say, "...because they called ME Aralez!" instead of, "...because they called Aralez!"
Correct me if I am wrong though!
I thought it was really amazing how brave and efficient King was during this mission and think he is quite the amazing dog! I also really liked how you kept a dog's type of thinking throughout the story. This was a refreshing a beautiful story. Keep up the good work! I am excited to read the next one when I come back to it! :)
Hi Sarah!
ReplyDeleteYou're storybook is very unique in that it is told from the perspective of and centered around a dog. You don't see that everyday and especially since a lot of the storybooks that our classmates are writing are told by a human being. The pictures you use to give us, the reader, a visual sense of what King looks like is astounding. Now we have a face to put to a name and it really creates a prefect visual for the reader. Another great thing you chose to add to each story is the fact that each region or location gets its own little introduction and history lesson. I've never heard of the two locations used in your first two stories, but only after reading the first paragraph I was enlightened by it's proper introduction. You also do a very good job with your authors note. I get a little bit of the original stories background and it makes the picture more whole.
Hey Sarah! Wow this semester has gone by fast! I really really loved your storybook. It was such a unique idea to focus the perspective from a dogs point of view. I think that your portfolio is the only one I have read that hasnt been from the view point of a human. The images you use was a good idea as well. It lets us put a face to the character so you can really imaging what king is doing throughout the stories. I love stories like that. Its like playing a little a movie in your head and this time I can put King right into those movies. I think one thing I would change is the way your paragraphs are in the center. If that makes you happy I understand but for me I guess I am just used to reading from all the way from the left to right. But other than that you did a good job of providing detail which made for good imagery. Great stories!
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